Selina, while I think the flowers and the silkworm/butterfly look very beautiful, I agree with those who felt that the composition is off. The placement of the figure and her angle seem arbitrary to me; why not place her in the middle and have everything else revolving around her? I also liked the suggestion of adding more bees. The bee is so wonderfully drawn, but as it is now it doesn't look too menacing. A whole swarm would have been quite powerful in evoking the idea of bullying, and this would have provided a nice contrast to the peacefulness of her expression. Perhaps you can try moving things around in Photoshop and seeing if you can come up with a composition that does justice to the idea. Your idea here is very interesting, and your approach to it has much potential.
Selina, while I think the flowers and the silkworm/butterfly look very beautiful, I agree with those who felt that the composition is off. The placement of the figure and her angle seem arbitrary to me; why not place her in the middle and have everything else revolving around her? I also liked the suggestion of adding more bees. The bee is so wonderfully drawn, but as it is now it doesn't look too menacing. A whole swarm would have been quite powerful in evoking the idea of bullying, and this would have provided a nice contrast to the peacefulness of her expression. Perhaps you can try moving things around in Photoshop and seeing if you can come up with a composition that does justice to the idea. Your idea here is very interesting, and your approach to it has much potential.
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