Jim, I liked your idea here very much, but I think you could have done so much more with it. The figures look good, but the placement of the text seems arbitrary, and the background looks unconsidered. If it's frustration and anger you want to convey, one good way to achieve that is with dark, agitated, aggressive mark-making. I also agree with those who suggested you add more figures. A whole crowd of these people would have been quite powerful. Maybe against a dark black background? As it is, this looks like a regular homework assignment rather than like a midterm project that you spent 20 hours on. I'd like to see you be more daring and ambitious in your assignments -- perhaps for the rest of the semester you'll do this. You could also take this idea here and make another piece implementing some of the suggestions!
Jim, I liked your idea here very much, but I think you could have done so much more with it. The figures look good, but the placement of the text seems arbitrary, and the background looks unconsidered. If it's frustration and anger you want to convey, one good way to achieve that is with dark, agitated, aggressive mark-making. I also agree with those who suggested you add more figures. A whole crowd of these people would have been quite powerful. Maybe against a dark black background? As it is, this looks like a regular homework assignment rather than like a midterm project that you spent 20 hours on. I'd like to see you be more daring and ambitious in your assignments -- perhaps for the rest of the semester you'll do this. You could also take this idea here and make another piece implementing some of the suggestions!
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