Nanxi, I think your idea here was very strong, and your approach to it was refreshingly original. I liked some of the suggestions you got in class, particularly the one about making the text seem like it's cutting into the skin and the one about having a bloody piece of meat missing. As it is, the conceptual element in your drawing is very clear, but the whole thing could be more emotionally charged. The painted flesh looks good, but I don't like the edges around the figure -- particularly the upper edge, which seems like it should be more emphatic. I also think the deep red at the bottom is more evocative than the pink you have up top. Making the whole background dark red will really make that figure pop forward, and it will add to the emotional intensity. I'd like to see this again after you implement some of the suggestions!
Nanxi, I think your idea here was very strong, and your approach to it was refreshingly original. I liked some of the suggestions you got in class, particularly the one about making the text seem like it's cutting into the skin and the one about having a bloody piece of meat missing. As it is, the conceptual element in your drawing is very clear, but the whole thing could be more emotionally charged. The painted flesh looks good, but I don't like the edges around the figure -- particularly the upper edge, which seems like it should be more emphatic. I also think the deep red at the bottom is more evocative than the pink you have up top. Making the whole background dark red will really make that figure pop forward, and it will add to the emotional intensity. I'd like to see this again after you implement some of the suggestions!
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